Lokia Jackson

[lokia]

Name: Lokia Jackson


Alias: Lokia Fidora


Sex: Male


Sexuality: BI


Race: Hybrid (1/4 demon 1/4 Neko 1/2 angel)


Powers/Abilities: Lokia has wings and can fly his father was half fire demon so he can control little bits of fire he also had cat ears and the power of confession.


Age: 25


Height: 6’ 1”


Weight: 175


Occupation: Owner of a chain of stores that secretly sells slaves out of some of their warehouses


Weapon(s): Two whips one for each hand.


Accessories: None


Appearance:

Clothes- Lokia's very muscular, and to show it off, generally wears muscle shirts, and the shirts themselves are generaly baggy, but he has a few tighter ones that accent his abs and chest. For pants, he wears baggy pants; jeans, army, capris, etc.

Wings- Lokia has fairly large wings, each being 6 feet in length. The feathers are a soft white tint, and cover his wings completely. He generally hide his wings though- from embarrassment.

Face- Lokia's face is generally pale, though it takes on a blue color when he's using his confession abilities, and when he takes on his demon form, it has a slight red color.

Hair- Black, thick, and wavy.


Personality: Lokia is nice for a slave owner. He treats his slaves with much compassion, And if you are a good Friend he is very loyal. He takes care of poor and mistreated people. His angel side is strong in him. He goes out of his way to help his loyal friends.

But at the same time he is tempermental and quick to anger. If you are a good enemy he will strike until you are down. He is vengeful and believes an eye for an eye. If you anger him enough he will make sure you end up in a morgue.

There are many ways to anger this hybrid and once you anger him you enter a dangerous road. Some ways you can anger him are: Calling him a dirty half-breed, Hurting someone he loves, or stealing from him. These are just a few of the ways you can anger him. If he is angered in a small way Techno or trance music can calm him down.

Appealing Characteristics:

Nice

Kind

Sweet

Manly

Strong

Appalling Characteristics:

Tenpermental

Vengeful

Hateful

Mean

Brutal

Likes:

Girls

Money

Guys

Animals

Angels

Dislikes:

Black Angels

Physchic Vampires

Higher Beings

Nekos

Fears:

Death

Old Ageing

Becoming a slave

Physchic Vampires

Strengths:

Intelligence

His Slaves like him

Money can buy anything

computer skills

Weaknesses:

Conscionce

quick to Anger

Hatefulness

Greed

Selfishness


Password:Admin Edited (only thing i saw that looked like a password)

[xoCharm]

Picture ;; fix the code bitte. <3

Occupation ;; please explain to me this secret slavery business as it is essential to the plot.

Appearance ;; can you develop this more into suitable paragraphs, please hun?

Personality ;; you forgot this section entirely.

Weaknesses ;; so.. his neko side can make it rain? Only shapeshifters have the ability to contact nature as such.

Password ;; wrong darlin'. There's little crossed out letters in each rule. it's two words.

[xoCharm]

Hun.. I feel so bad for not accepting you by now lol, but I really really need the personality developed more. ._. What's he like when he's sad? Does he go out of his way to help people he cares for/views as friends? What triggers his anger?

It may help if you gather insight from other members here as well. Ask around, I'm sure plenty would love to aid you.

Once again, I'm terribly sorry. xx.

[xoCharm]

.. mrowl .. I guess.. you may rp here love, but just a heads up I'm going to discuss your profile with the other admins, so your pro will stay in character creation for now. Have fun. <3

[xoCharm]

Alright, us Admins have decided that we would like to see a roleplay sample from you. It must be current, of this character, and done solely by you and you alone. Make it as long as you want, pick whatever place you desire, etc. Just act as if you were opening a thread. We'll let you know our final decision then hun.

Amara sneaks in --
That means, it can't be one sentence, or three sentences. Form it with how much Ghost requires with a post.

Amara fades out --

[xoCharm]

Why SIRE JACKSON, madcap, where you goin' with that ip address? I do believe the rules were YOU

[/u] were suppose to come up with that roleplay post, and our ip records show that is indeed far from the case. Sorry love, but you voided out. Amara has something to say, so I'll let her get to it. Now don't think we're attacking you, because, well, lol I'm not but, ; shrug. ; Feel free to hang around in the cbox if you wish.[/center]

[amara]

I'm Sorry Dear Jackson. It seems you've been caught.

His last known Ip.
216.183.155.46 Free Damned
204.234.245.52 Marked
(^thats possible depending on how many computers)
The Ip of his previous edited post
24.246.195.172 Whomeever.
(This. Is completely different compared to the two up there.)

It, just doesn't make the staff team happy. Next time you try to join. Make sure you try to hide the fact that someone else is going to do it.

[lokia]

Lokia walked down by the cemetery on his way home as he walked by the cemetery he noticed a celestial demon. Lokia could not stand Celestial demons they pretended to be angels so people would worship them the more people that worshipped them the more power the race got. Lokia walked up behind the celestial demon and quickly slit his throat.

As Lokia continued down the road his phone rang he answered it and listened to the voice on the other end. After he got off the phone he was quite upset. There was a slave break from his Main warehouse. He knew that if info got out that he had a racket going he would never hear the end of it he would have to give the order to kill the leader of this pack of slaves to prevent another break.

Lokia began another route which would take him to his warehouse. Once he got there he quickly caught onto their bloody trail. He felt sorry for the slaves they were so mistreated. He treated his slaves like family. Most people didn’t even treat their slaves like animals.

[xoCharm]

Well, you met the length requirements hun just fine, but you have some serious punctuation problems. There is run on after run on. Additionally there's a slight lack of sensory description. If you can clean and buffer that up and keep your posts as such or more, you may be accepted.